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Jealousy kills you,
With every ache.
You keep your mouth shut,
Your smile is fake.

You say it's okay,
When really it's not.
It makes you sick,
But it's these thoughts you fought.

You feel the heat in your shoulders,
your hands start to shake,
You keep to yourself,
as you silently wait.

You deal with the pain,
with each word you write,
Thinking nice thoughts,
To help your mind fight.

Your stomach is turns,
You feel you should die,
But you breathe a breath in,
and you try not to cry.

It's really not bad,
this lie that you made,
To help you fight through,
As the feeling will fade.
I wrote this to help me deal with a little jealousy issue I was having with this girl...who is a friend of my friend....
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:iconmoziin:
Moziin Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2014  Student General Artist
This explains how I'm feeling perfectly right now.
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xXMonstersRawrXx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Shit. This was wonderful.
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Brokenheartedone Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013
Incredibly true, It's a struggle for me. I love this guy so much, and I'm furiously jealous when there's other girls around him.
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MaikoTheDoll Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
So damn true.. Nice work, I've really enjoyed it!
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KingBatty Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mhmm.
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jenedict Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i feel u
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Axilery Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is exactly how I feel... I have a crush on this girl, but she's with someone else... That lucky son of a bitch.
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PhoenixSkywriter Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much.

Recently I went through a messy breakup and he already has someone new and I am sick with jealousy...

So I need this. Badly.
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Taigan Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
I needed to read this today. Thank you.
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artymista Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful. It describes every thought and thing that happens when I get jealous. Which is often. Why? I don't want to be, I want to be friends with this person. But why? Why must I feel this way? I can't control it and I'll just have to bare it until the one being stolen realizes.
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ShyButterflyLove Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm a really jealous person I just realized. I hate it, it's awful. I'm jealous at those who are so loved, because I can't get that love. I just want to scream. >.<
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miiabeL Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i relate like no other
you just spoke the words i was unable to express
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Vohcaz Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
Exactly how I feel right now. I am sick and tired of nearly everyone on deviantart being so much better at art than I and sometimes ill come across people saying that their total newbies at art like me when their art is still better than mine. I could go on ranting and raging for ages about how my drawings look like total ass cancer but I wont.

Brilliant poem, very well writen and discribed my feelings exactly. One of the worst feelings imaginable in my opinion.
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GinPhin509 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
Amazingly written. Pictures the exact emotions. Bravo.
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SalutDolce Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
Argh I wish there was away to cope with this feeling. It's the worst feeling ever. I wish I could just stop.

But I feel a little better I'm not the only one who ever feels this...but at the same time it pains me to see others feel like this. I wish no one had to ever feel this...jealousy.
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bunpika121 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes I feel like this too…I try not to be jealous, but the feeling never goes away...
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SofiaSevero Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I wanna stop feeling that way , but how ? :(
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speedjump123 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
This is exactly how I feel! But for me its so painful for the fact that I'm jealous of my own bestfriend..
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SuzakuGirl13 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Omg, this is exactly how I'm feeling right now . . . Very well written though! :clap:
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isabellemoonlight Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Ahh I love this, that is exactly what jealousy feels like
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PANDAScanKILLu Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
My emotions right there :)
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JS-Gutless Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This describes the feeling so perfectly. *pained smile*
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Br3nDaN13 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011
I feel the same way...
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VxTurtleBoy Featured By Owner May 31, 2011
Love can be a bitch here and there but its all good man. Someday, you'll make love YOUR bitch :D! Haha there's still other people out there so hang in there.
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GravitiesTrixter18 Featured By Owner May 31, 2011  Student Digital Artist
going through a jealously phase of my best friend... so not fun, we just moved to a co-ed school and a guy who's in my class came up to me just to say she's really pretty and is she taken... not so fun

anywho good poem! perfect words... more or less the words that go through my head
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nocoolnamesavailible Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I quite like your poem...I find our writing style to be very similar. Perhaps it's just the rhyming pattern though.

Would it be narcissistic of me to say Well done? [link]
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BinturongBoat Featured By Owner May 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written, hun :+fav:
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OokamiiChiix3 Featured By Owner May 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
oh this is so absolutely true...
beautiful! (:
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Wolfpelt8131 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011
Wow, this is exactly how I feel....kind of...but I'm in the exact same situation you are/were with your friend......So I know what you're going through, good luck.

Nice poetry ^^
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theflowergoddess Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2011  Student Digital Artist
This is such an awesome poem... it really does describe it well....
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CecilieMcClymont Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011   Artisan Crafter
Thank you for sharing this. It is nice to know others feel the same way.
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FoxAndLeo4Ever Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
i think this is how i feel.... i love this poem!
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crankedtothe-max Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliantly done, you captured the feeling perfectly as well as the confusion and pain that is caused by it.
I like the optimistic ending (:
-faves-
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crankedtothe-max Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Aaaand now I feel inadequate about my poetry abilities xD
Really brilliant, it captures the feeling perfectly, and not just the jealousy but the confusion and pain caused by it.
-faves-
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BubbleGumStars Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
its like you just described my emotions.
good job.
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Winged-Demigoddess Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2011   Writer
Wow, this is just amazing. Totally captures the emotions so well. I know how it feels :|

Just beautiful! :heart:
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dragonsofshadows Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
how true :/
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pag90 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
Exactly how I feel... Thanks for the read, it helped a lot supprisingly :) I just hope that mine will fade soon. You just keep telling yourself to move on or to not care but they only cover up what you really feel.
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Dravari Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Honest and true to the feeling of jealousy.
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relax-gal Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is so good! It's exactly how you feel, when you are jealous. :)
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Deviantly-Atheist Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010   General Artist
Love this poem. Really gets to me right now, having real hardcore jealousy problems right now and this poem describes exactly how I'm feeling. :/

Beautiful poem though, short and emotional!
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Katao192 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, this is really beautiful for such a short poem.
I love how you bolded the last words, made them seem more intense.
Exactly how I feel when I get jealous. Which is a lot. -.-"
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JoelTheGuitarMan Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2010
This is a great poem, I have a lil jealousy issue with my girlfriend as well, I just wish I could articulate as good as you :D
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ViralEnvy Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This is perfect. I really love it.
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CandyPopLolita Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2010
This couldn't be more perfect about my situation.
It hurts just reading this, that's how true it is.
Thank you for writing this. Thank you. :nod:
<3
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koiitachi Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2010
I can relate, lol, cept the girl is my friends' best friend. x-x; and I hope things get better fur you =// it's a beautiful poem D:
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Fiction-Journal Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2010
beautiful <3 so very true, love the rhyming too- works very well x
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People-Get-Eaten Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2010
I find this a wonderful, relate-able poem.
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Keronu Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2010
All I can think to say right now is thank you for making me feel less crazy.
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Arthur6420 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010
... my boyfriend is cheating on me with my best friends boyfriend .....
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